Citizen Cobra reading / Baroness review

I've been a little preoccupied with staring at a word document and trying to cut down words and maybe remove sentences while making things easy for actors to say out loud AND also making sure the whole thing makes sense and is also funny.

See that run-on sentence? I can actually write LONGER run-on sentences. "Marathon-on sentences." And I fully expect actors to first memorize and secondly say these things. With proper emotion and feeding off each other. Because I am an unfeeling, uncaring, unsympathetic person trying to pass himself off as some kind of writing-guy.